This is the fourth and final part in a series on 'Author Mentors'. Each of these lessons utilise a short extract as a model to encourage student engagement in the same vein as the writing-focused modules of the NSW senior courses (Reading to Write in Year 11 and Craft of Writing in Year 12). In order, these have been:
and now, as a means of promoting a more extended response:
- Discursive Writing - Kate Veitch
1. Using Authors to Create. The first thing to do here is to walk students through some broad steps for creating their own piece of writing. I will note here that I'm not too hung up on ensuring that the writing is 'discursive' per se, this part of the lesson is just about prompting some thinking and eliciting a response. In using a model text to create their own piece of writing, students should consider each of the following:
- Inspiration: An essential step with using any text as a model for one's writing is to read the text and examine the way that the author writes.
- Construction: The next step is for the student to craft their own writing in a similar fashion to the author (our mileage may vary here as it depends on what aspect of the author's work we choose to focus on).
- Imitation: The student looks at connecting their own writing to an author's and developing an awareness of similarity or areas of inspiration.
- Reflection: The final stage of this process is to reflect and use correct terminology while explaining how one's own writing works, and integrating an awareness of the previous steps.
Now that students have an idea of what they can do, practise with a short stimulus as a mini-lesson. I like this quote from The Old Man and the Sea by Ernest Hemingway.
Everything about him was old except his eyes and they were the same colour as the sea and were cheerful and undefeated.
Students use the stimulus to do a miniature version of the Inspiration, Construction, Imitation, Reflection schema from above. Instructions follow:
Read the sentence above, craft your own line of description in the same way, describe which parts are similar, and reflect on how the sentence works.
We're not looking for a long or especially creative piece here. A student who is adept at creative writing does not necessarily need this level of scaffolding. We're looking, however, at ways in which we can work with all Year 10 students - which includes students who may not be confident with composition and reflection. By reducing the task to a single sentence and scaffolding it, we allow such students the opportunity to walk through the process with guidance and to learn exactly what they'll need to do when they eventually get to Year 12.
2. Extract - First Impressions. Now we'll look at an extract from a great non-fiction essay by Kate Veitch called 'Small Eye'. In NSW English parlance, this could be called 'discursive' writing.
We'll then contextualise the piece by starting with some general questions that ensure students have a grounded understanding of what they're looking at. Here are four such questions:
- What is the text about?
- What motif appears throughout the text?
- How does this connect to the theme of the text?
- Find one phrase/word choice with positive connotations and one phrase/word choice with negative connotations.
3. Explanation - Non-Fiction or 'Discursive' Writing. This is as good as any opportunity to introduce students to discursive writing. In giving an introductory overview of this genre of writing, we'll outline just a few key features rather than going too in-depth. I would start with:
- Written from the writer's personal perspective (first person point-of-view)
- Focuses on a subject or topic that the writer wants to discuss.
- Use of anecdotes, facts, history, humour to entertain and educate the reader.
Students then use the above as a guide to brainstorm the ways in which 'Small Eye' fits the description of discursive writing.
4. Examining the Text. In continuing what is essentially the 'inspiration' stage, it's useful to now get students to look more closely at the text to consider how each element is used by Veitch with specific purpose. A worksheet is included here:
Students work through the examples to identify and explain each of the techniques/non-fiction devices used. This includes:
- Adverbs, Ellipsis, Humour, Word Choice: How does the author control the way the reader feels about the text?
- Anecdotes: How do the little stories told by the author add detail to their ideas?
- Epigraph: How does the introductory quote make the theme clearer to the reader?
- Logos: In what way are facts figures, and/or logic used to make the writing more convincing?
- Repetition: In what way does the repeating of ideas or words help to tie the text together?
5. Construct and Imitate. Students should now have some preparatory knowledge that allows them to embark upon their own piece of writing with a similar theme. Provide some images along with the instructions below (two stimulus images are included in the PowerPoint at the end of this blog). I will mention here that, at this point, the 'lesson' may stretch into multiple lessons.
Create your own piece of personal non-fiction writing. You must:
- Write 300-500 words
- Use at least one of the images as a thematic prompt - what can you say about one (or both) of these things? [Note: One image prompts discussion of travel, the other photography]
- Use 2-3 of the techniques featured in the Examining 'Small Eye' worksheet from the previous part of the lesson.
6. Reflection. With the growing emphasis on 'reflecting' on one's own composition that has arisen over the last two decades in the Australian curriculum and NSW syllabuses, it becomes necessary to explicitly teach this as part of the compositional process. In effect, it's basically just an integrated way of getting students to engage in analysis - albeit focused on their own writing.
Step 1. Examine Your Writing. Highlight and annotate parts of your text that might show:
- Where you have taken inspiration from Kate Veitch's 'Small Eye'.
- Where you have used techniques such as: similes, metaphors, motifs, anecdotes, allusion, alliteration, imagery, effective verbs, carefully-chosen adverbs, etc.
- Where you have described things.
- Where you spoke really clearly about the main idea.
Step 2. Explain Your Writing. Write a paragraph 'reflecting' on one aspect of your writing. You can do this by following this formula:
- Introduce the example you are talking about.
- Quote the example.
- Identify the reason why it was highlighted during your annotation.
- Explain why or how you used this example.
And there you have it. Some or all of the above might seem too explicit but I really do think there are a lot of students in Year 9 or 10 who need to be shown exactly what it is we're looking for, especially as we live in a society that increasingly swims in a stream of online data that can leave the younger generation feeling a bit adrift when it comes to more traditional forms of writing.
The Author Mentors sequence is designed to walk students back through the steps of analysis and composition. This is hopefully done in a way that leaves no stone unturned when it comes to a student's own comprehension of what it is that Year 12 requires from them in terms of composing their own imaginative or discursive writing. There's no harm in repeating things that students have already been taught, it's this sort of repetition that's so effective in Maths pedagogy and helps to build student automaticity. Creative writing is a hard ask for students who feel uncreative or (dare I say it) just aren't interested in creative writing and probably never will be. By breaking it down into constituent parts and using discrete extracts that reduce the cognitive demand of reading, we can hone in on explicitly teaching some key skills.
It all works as scaffolding. If we start in junior grades then it becomes easier to lift this scaffolding away for Years 11 and 12.
The above lesson(s) can be found as a PowerPoint
here.
Acknowledgement: The following material has been adapted and modified specifically for this blog. I would like to acknowledge some of my colleagues - Ashleigh Galea, Lauren Hage, Amra Winter - who helped develop some additional material not included here.